Sunday, September 14, 2008

The Things You Didn't Do

For many months that I have been writing posts and reading other blogger's' posts, I have come to realise that there is immense talent in people when it comes to penning down poetry. I mean, I, in particular, cannot write meaningful poetry no matter how hard I try....and this feeling really made me feel bad sometimes.

So lately, I was so tempted to write my very first version of a poem....this one does not tell about me, or anyone I know, and I want to dedicate this poem, or whatever you call it, to the bloggers whose poetic sense really inspires me, and makes me jealous (Truly)....some of whom are: V, Riversoul, Sameera, Pooja, Anusha, Lena, Anindita, Cinderella and finally Gunj - for she is the reason I started my blog in the first place.

No, this is not another TAG story - this is a mere dedication to the people who write beautiful poetry. I apologise if I forgot to mention any name here, it is certainly not intentional!

My poem is certainly not an original piece of work, it has been inspired from something I read nearly 15 years ago, and so if it sounds familiar, Please Excuse Me!

My poem is called "The Things You Didn't Do", and it goes something like this:

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Do you remember the time when I spilled Strawberry Pie all over your favourite car rug?
I thought you would scream at me,
But You Didn't!

Do you remember the time when I wanted to go out, but you said "It would rain", and it did?
I thought you would say, "I told you so",
But You Didn't!

Do you remember the time when I forgot to tell you that the party was formal, and you showed up in casuals?
I thought you would stop talking to me,
But You Didn't!

Do you remember the time when I drove your car into the wall and damaged it?
I thought you would hit me,
But You Didn't!

Do you remember the time when I flirted with other guys just to make you jealous?
I thought you would stop loving me,
But You Didn't!

Yes, there were a lot of things that I thought you would do, but you didn't.
I wanted to tell you about how much I thought about you and cared about you and loved you.
Yes, I wanted to tell you all when you would return from the war,
But You Didn't!

74 comments:

Anonymous said...

Gagan, This was a great start at writing poetry! I really liked it and the last line really got me sad!!

It was great!!!

Ne

Vinz said...

coming here for the first time through some common blogs...

ah..!! poetry..a field where i would love to be a part of..i always wonder how these guys come up with such brilliant creations..!!

and regarding ur one, considering it as our first creation, it was great..
and the concept was too good..!!

keep writing..!!
:)

Bhai with Chai said...

//Yes, I wanted to tell you all when you would return from the war,
But You Didn't!

!!
I couldn't see that coming!
Fab!
Keep it goin'!

Mampi said...

Very nice poem it is.
write some more from your past. I m sure you have some in your diary.

Priya Joyce said...

hey wonderful first attempt frnd and its not very difficult for u i can see tat as the people by whom u r inspired are very good indeed lovely Gagan

Anwesa said...

So two non-poets r trying poetry.1 of dem is Gagan,d uder is me..(its not a poem,but 4 lines for someone special).after reading ur poem,d 1st thot that came 2 my mind was the poem-Home they brought her warrior dead-by Lord Alfred Tennyson.The poem was spontaneous,the last 2 lines changed my mood-pensive lines..

Sameera Ansari said...

Awwwww that was so sweet!

You have written it very well,even if it was inspired by another work.Keep it up buddy :)

In Bloggerville,I admire Cinderella's poetry.Her style is just something else!

broca's area said...

hmm...a good start!!!.:)..well written!!..[even a thousand mile journey starts with a step!!]

Prashant Sree said...

Hi Gagan,

Thats a fabulous starting.,. I was wondering on seeing the post title, thats it gonna be a bit philosophical, but it proved to be a bit emotional ;)

Iam havent tried my hand at poetry, yet my suggestion, what ever you do be yourself...

All t Best

anusha said...

AWW.. than you for putting my name there..m truly blessed..

n second..it ws amazing.. i hvnt read this before.. so for me its original!!.. n welcome..MR. POET :)

Anonymous said...

yeah that was a gr8 start...!! and a truly gr8 dedication too...they are indeed brilliant poets tho i know only 4 of them myself...!!

wishin u write even more brilliant ones...!! and i see i am not alone in that wishful thinking...!! keep goin gagan!!! :)

Lucifer said...

oh man d last line jus stopped my heartbeat for a sec...dat was brillaint!!! d thought gone into it...jus bloody brilliant!!!

Anonymous said...

great start gagan dude !!!

really i cant write a poem either... these poets on blogger go one like wow !!

u also ave a excellent first attempt..

i dnt read poetry much so i really cant find any resemblances here

rainboy said...

wow ! awesome man.It was the end that hit me hard.
And you say u can't write poetry..


here's one for you..
Do you remember the time i told you i would come...and i couldn't.
I thought that you'll understand.

But you didn't.
hehe :D hoho

Abhishek Behera said...

... lovely. you drenched me with such romantic imagery. the unexpected end ... just left me feeling so shattered.

eagerly waiting for you subsequent posts.

Unknown said...

@singlendacity89: Thanks for the complement....i really appreciate it!

Unknown said...

@Vinz aka Vinu: First of all, thanks for coming and taking the time off to read my blog. I really appreciate this kind gesture of yours.
Then, thank you for all the kind words of appreciation, and I am truly obliged. Please keep visiting!!!!

Unknown said...

@bhai with chai: Haha, m glad the end part took ou by surprise, and am so glad you liked it!

Unknown said...

@Mampi: Thankyou for liking it, I will surely come up with more stuff from my past....but tell me something, How do you know that I maintain a diary????

Unknown said...

@Priya Joyce: Thanks a ton, and I totally agree....these people are really really good when it comes down to poetry!!!!

Unknown said...

@Anwesha: I am glad you liked it....the poem you are referring to, well, I havent read it, but will surely do now!!!!
And I am sorry if I ruined your mood, it was just that I thought it would be nice to end it in a surprise!!!! :)

Mampi said...

Aiwen hi bass, main ta tukka marya si, chor di dahri wich tinka, hehehe

but seriously speaking, if you had written this, that means there has to be more stuff stored up somewhere; most likely in a diary.

Unknown said...

@Sameera: I am glad you liked it....after all, you are one of my inspirers!
I also admire Cinderella's poems, dont know I forgot to mention her name in the post....will do that right away!!!! ;)

Unknown said...

@Brocasarea: Thanks for the complement, and yes, I totally agree with that phrase!!!!

Unknown said...

@Prashant Sree: Thanks for the kind words of appreciaion, and yes, I will surely be myself....no matter what it is and no matter what it means!!!! Thanks for the suggestion. :)

Unknown said...

@Anusha: Thanks for welcoming me first of all....and please dont thank me for putting ur name there....you were the first blogger poet that I met and admired....your name had to be there!!!!
And finally, thank you for liking what I wrote!

Unknown said...

@Vinay: Haha, thanks a lot for the beautiful words of appreciaion. And these people are really talented indeed....and ya, I really hope that your wish gets fulfilled really soon!!!! ;)

Unknown said...

@Mayz: I really liked the way you complemented my writing....Just loved it!!!! Just bloddy Loved It!!!! Thnaks a ton brother!

Unknown said...

@Paratrooper: Thank you for being so kind to me as always....I really love to hear good things from you! ;)

Unknown said...

@V: I thought amongst all the people, you will be the toughest one to impress, but I guess I was wrong....hehe!
Thanks for liking it....
now here's my version of the small little snippet:
Do you remember the time when you promised you would visit me, and out of everyone in the world, i thought you would be the person who would always keep his promise?
But You didnt!

Unknown said...

@Abhishek Sim: Thanks for coming to my page and taking the time off to read it.
Thank you for liking what I wrote. I really appreciate it. Please keep visitng. Take Care!

Unknown said...

@Mampi: Your tukkas are so accurate....I really want to stand up and applaud for you. Haha....and yes, I will definately come up with more of such stuff....pakka se!!!! ;)

rainboy said...

hehe..a smart ass u are.

Unknown said...

@V: That toh I am!!!! ;)

Anwesa said...

ohhh!u dint spoil my mood..just made me a little emo..sting in the tail endings r f9..

Anwesa said...

I always thought you would comment on my posts after reading them,
But you didn't!

Unknown said...

@Anwesa: Haha....thanks for the complement yet again....and I am so very sorry that I havent been able to visit yours or anyone's blog for that matter....I will make sure that I do that really soon....please mujhe maafi dedo!!!! :-S

Lena said...

that is some great start, can say better than mine was :)
i do feel insecure with poetry, it needs to bring some message and thats not easy to do.. and you managed it successfully.. Too often we just dont say things when we should until it is too late.

keep writing!! :)

Anonymous said...

hey gagan , i know that something is happening in ur heart thats why u have rittin such beautiful poetry, im lovin it ............ amazing ggn ur a true star , keep it up , and i would like to say to every one that love exists still. ....i changed my opinion when i heard it .
the track which plays is also awsome and heart touching , i got goosebums........................

Anwesa said...

chalo maaf kiya!

Unknown said...

@lena: Thank you so much for appreciating what I had to write....I really love the fact that you liked and admired my poetry!!!!

Unknown said...

@Anonymous: Dear sir/madam, it would have been a pleasure to have known who you were because I would have have loved to meet and know someone who writes so beautiful praises about me....
Again, I want to say that you noticed the condition of my heart pretty nicely, and so I am very sure that you are one of my close friends....because who else can know me better? And yes, even I believe in love....and I must admit....its a great feeling!!!!
If you read this comment, please let me know who you are....thank you so much for all the kind words that you have said about me and my poem!!!!

Unknown said...

@Anwesa: Aapka bahut bahut shukriya....aur main waada karta hun, aisi galti dobara nahi hogi....;) :P :D :)

Pooja said...

b'fully written...lovely!!!

who said u dont have poetic talents???u jus hadnt discovered it...m glad dat i played a li'l part in inspirin' u...

keep d gud work up...

Trinaa said...

brilliant first attempt gagan...keep it going! :))))

RiverSoul said...

Woah......
:)
I'm late!! I'm so sorry, brother. I've been having a hell of a week here. . . . 4 weeks of classes and 2 seminars under my belt already.
:)
Now I must say, i'm stumped by the last line.
Hats off to you, bro, for having done so well and at your first attempt too, at that. I've never written from the female perspective. . . . But your work has inspired me..... The war scenario is all too familiar. Well penned, bro.
I'm sure there's lots more where this work came from....
I wanna see more of your poetry....yessir!
:)
And my work inspires you? I'm honoured, brother.
:)
Keep rocking.
:)

RiverSoul said...

And You're Tagged

Unknown said...

@Pooja: Haha....thanks for all the lovely and encouraging complements....I will try not to disappoint you!!!!

Unknown said...

@Trinaa: Thanks for the complements, I really appreciate it!

Unknown said...

@Riversoul: Haha....thanks for the lovely comment....I really love it when someone is so encouraging as you....I will try to pen down more of it....but that would definately take a long long time....
P.S: Thanks for tagging me yet again. ;)

$mit@ said...

hey gud one!

Akshaya Kamalnath said...

nice blog u've got here. Whatever the form of expression, its the actual expressing that matters. I loved the name of your blog...two decades and still counting!! My view is I'm just twenty, still such a kid...my sis says I'll soon begin saying ...shit I'm growing older:)

Akshaya Kamalnath said...

And the poem was really meaningful.

Unknown said...

Nice poem.. so i know that you are a good poet.. waiting for the next one.. go on..

Cinderella said...

I loved it !!!
Absolutely-totally-honestly !!!!

Amazing first start Gagan ! Really.

Cinderella said...

And I agree Sammy is one admirable poet - story writer - creative conjurer et all !

She has that power in her words that make you see things. I mean if you can connect and see what she's seeing.

:)

Gunjan Aylawadi said...

woohoo gagandat was ssoooooo cool
trust mme i cudnt hav dne half as good a job if i eva tried!!
boy!!

n i got a free ka dedication too inspite of being so useless!!
im happpyyyy

love ya
muah!

Pooja said...

visit me at http://smilestearslife.blogspot.com/

new blog!!

Harsh said...

the poem ws wonderfull..although i already read it..
acha ek aur cheez bta ki apni pic kaise dalte ha blog pe ...and read my blog also i ve also started writting..

Jagjit said...

wow! nice poem man.

Sameera Ansari said...

Tussi kaha ho?

Unknown said...

@Smita: Thanks a lot

Unknown said...

@Akshaya Kamalnath: Thanks a lot for visiting my page.....and trust me....if you love yourself....you will never complain! Hope to see you back soon!

Unknown said...

@Tiger: Lolz.....Thanks for the appreciation....and I really dont know when the next one will come!!!! Hehe!

Unknown said...

@Cinderella: I can totally relate to what you said about Sameera. And ya, Thanks a lot for the appreciation....it really means a lot to me!

Unknown said...

@Gunj: You can never be useless for me....u give me inspiration....and I dont need to say that every now and then. Thanks for being there always! :)

Unknown said...

@Pooja: I will surely visit it sometime soon....pakka promise!

@Harsh: Thanks a lot for reading....It really means a lot to me that you take time out of your schedule to visit my page and read and comment. So Thank you!

Unknown said...

@Jagjit: Thanks a lot! And thanks for visting my page....Please keep visiting!!!! :)

Unknown said...

@Sameera: I am so sorry for not being able to write something....its just that I couldnt find time to really sit and think....this place that I am in is so wild and huge....that I hardly find time to take a breath....but I promise....I will be back....and that too very soon!!!! Thanks for waiting though!

Scribblers Inc said...

KAHAN HO MERE UNDYING CRITIC!! :D

Scribblers Inc.

Unknown said...

@Scribblers Inc.: I am so sorry that I couldnt be much around to comment or read what you have been writing....but I promise you that whenevr I get free from what I am doing these days, I will read all that I have missed, and comment....it really is a pleasure for me to get a comment from you saying that you kinda miss me....so thanks a lot for that!!!! And I really am sorry....but ya, I must mention this....you still are my No. 1 person here! :)

Anwesa said...

waiting 4 u 2 post sumthing..ur still on my blogroll..n its better 4 me if u remove this word verification process.

Himanshu Wadhwa said...

ohhh man i don't knw u wrote it or who but d last line really touched my heart.......too gud man

Regards
Himanshu

Unknown said...

@Anwesha: I am trying my best to keep up to your expectations!

@Himanshu: Thanks for appreciating! :)